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Message thread at CPP
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**** Writers and Book Lovers ****
post one of your favourite books and your story and you're in, there are competitions for best stories | i did | 
fluffy23 & Moonlight | | 2011-10-04 13:05:15 | | I did! ;) oh now will you post purplo?
pleeeaaasse! | 
MAC1023 & King | | 2011-10-05 00:50:52 | | Yea purplo, where's the copy u promise to send me to my mail...?? oh and who enjoyed my story??? please answer me please tell me how i did
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fluffy23 & Moonlight | | 2011-10-05 02:59:46 | | i enjoyed your story Fluffy
here's Part 2 of A New Friend
Chapter 2
" Aaagh we need to find some shelter quick!",screamed Tayler as the rain overtook her voice."I think i see a shed in that clearing over there",yelled Grace."Ok lets gallop over there" Tayler screamed.Minutes later the two friends were safely in the warm shed."I wonder when the storm is going to stop"."Yeah I hope it stops soon"replied Grace.Creak went the shed door as a dripping wet girl walked in...
Will post more later :) | 
purplo9 & Midnight | | 2011-10-05 04:14:29 | | | THANKS I WORKED HARD ON IT AND I ALSO ENJOYED YOUR STORY TOO IT WAS AWESOME... |
fluffy23 & Moonlight | | 2011-10-06 01:03:15 | | Hi, I am reading nearly everything, telling stories with my little sister and writing down characteres that I like =)
PS. Your story is amazing fluffy23 ;) |
IAsim & Helia | | 2011-10-06 23:24:50 | | | what's part two of the ice story and the other story ending please post some also purplo |
fluffy23 & Moonlight | | 2011-10-07 02:14:43 | | this is the start for my new series!!!
The Mystery of Egypt book #1
The Hidden Chamber
Chapter One:
“Mum, I’ m going to the pyramids!†Siena said as she run towards the tour car.
Siena Louis was a typical thirteen year old girl who loves to explorer. She had blonde long, straight hair put into a bun and wore a blue cotton shirt with a blue skinny jean. She has a fun, funny attitude everyone is happy of.
She has two friends named Ella Winston and Rena Clarks and they were also thirteen.
Rena had brown short, curly hair which was clipped with glittery butterfly clips and she wore a yellow shirt with black shorts. She was serious and had a mind of a genius.
However, Ella was a funny and stubborn kind of girl. She never wants to do anything by herself or if she did, she would never finish it off. Ella had red waist long which was straight; tied into a ponytail and she wore a gold top with a white leggings.
They all were junior archeologists at Snow Lover Academy and they were tremendously lucky to live in Egypt.
“Hey guys nice to see you in your normal clothes and not your school clothes. They are so ugly with that green checker bow and that blue vast with the white blouse and the purple leggings, the black running shoes and not to mention we all have to wear the same! Double ugly.†Ella said as she made a face to her friends. “Ella,†Siena and Rena warned in unison.
They went in the green tour car to the pyramid which was a ten minutes drive. The driver lets people use it whenever they want, even to children but they weren’t allowed to drive it if they were under thirteen, most of the kids were devastated but the girls were happy that they were some of the lucky children that could drive the tour car of their age and this time, Rena drove.
“Have you ever heard the legend about the secret chamber?†Siena said as she cupped her hands together. Her two best friends were listening and their eyes were sparkling like the brightest stars in the night sky. “Thousands or maybe even billion years ago, there was a girl named Dina, her family was very poor but they were also greedy when they have money, Dina was the only person who wasn’t greedy, one day her father found a chamber in a pyramid, he was hiding it from all the others but his family and that’s how they got rich in a few weeks or days but one day Dina went to the chamber that her father told them about and did something that no one expected which was sink the chamber in sand then it became the hidden chamber. No one ever found it and it was at about nineteen forty four to my guess the first person to challenge themselves to discover was… Sabrina Alexon. The famous archeologist.†whispered Siena. “I love that legend, it’s so magical!†Rena said. She lifted up her head high as she drove them to the pyramids.
They got to the pyramids in a while when they saw Nancy Drew and Edna Tilt. Sienna, Ella and Rena wasn’t best friends with them, in fact Nancy and Edna was the last persons the girl would be friends with.
Nancy had black hair which was curled to her shoulders which were as normal, in style, but today it was tied into a bun and her blue eyes sparkled. She wore a white feathery dress which stops at her knee. She had diamond earring and boots with white sequins all over them.
However, Edna wears a summer blue dress which had flowers all over it and blue leather shoes which were covered with a big yellow bow in the middle. She wore a deep layer of red lipstick and her eyelid was covered with long fake blue eyelashes. Her golden fair was tied into a pony tail but usually wore her hair in pig tails but something was different that day.
“Oh, I didn’t know you smarty pants were coming to here.†smirked Nancy. “We’re hoping you weren’t… you know, Nancy and I was going to find the treasure of Dina… but I guess you would be much better at it…†Paisley said as she signed. “Well, no thank you… but there is not in the billion years as such thing about that legend. If there even is.†snapped Ella.
Sienna, Rena and Ella watched Nancy and Paisley walk off to the tent. Their hair slowly swift side to side as the wind blew it.
“I hate them… look at us we are so cool… that’s what they sound every day. I couldn’t care less, great, now I’m starting to sound like you Ella.†said Rena. “Soon enough, I would be able to say welcome… it’s the magic of Ella Winston.†remarked Ella.
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fluffy23 & Moonlight | | 2011-10-07 10:33:29 | | Okay well I'll try to post more of the Escape and (for now I'll call the Ice Skating story 'Ghost) Ghost. But I might not post a lot because I am busy all weekend. I have a halloween party, going to my grandparents, haveing a friend sleep over, and a horse lesson. But don't worry my fellow friends- I will post something!
Oh and I liked your story Fluffy- here is some constructive critisims:
-GREAT story :)
-The only thing I had trouble with was mixed up verb tenses- (some were present and past mixed together)
But G-R-E-A-T story !
=D |
MAC1023 & King | | 2011-10-07 23:33:35 | | | i need to edit it..its the unedit version thats why |
fluffy23 & Moonlight | | 2011-10-08 07:45:40 | |
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